Wednesday, August 10, 2011

Is beauty in the eye of the beholder... c/c?

Cute poem with fixed meter and end rhyme. My only petty critique would be to work on flow more. An example would be S1L4 try 'with some knitted gloves made by Mum'. 'By her Mum' tripped my tongue. Perhaps just me. Overall though, a delightful read and as a father, I would want a chaperone for her! lol

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